I was wondering what to write for Sunday 160.As usual ,it was raining outside and the weather was a nice time to write poems for a poeter like me.I got two ideas-rain and tears,dark and cold.I came up with two poems each one counting up to 160 characters including spaces.Yes,the weather was right to pin down more poems.I posted them.I merged in two photos together as one so that you may get an idea of my two poems.With the picture and the poem, from left to right,from the tree to the boy ..both talk their feelings out...
gulping in the dark night
waiting for a better tomorrow
for my answer
I pray
God never let me down
closed my eyes
drops of tears
fall upon the wet ground
as withered leaves
Stood staring out of the window
Standing alone in the cold
Gulping in the dark night
Waiting for a better tomorrow
I prayed
God never let me down
closed my eyes
drops of tears
fall upon the floor
writing Believe!
Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeletei hope that tomorrow brings drier eyes...and answers...nice remix in the second one...
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This is sweet 160.. two.. Lovely..
ReplyDeleteHi you are invited to "Room for Romance"...
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Sad and tender, hope the rain goes away and the tears turns to smiles,,, lovely 160, like the ending in the 2nd verse.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Joanny
drops of tears
ReplyDeletefall upon the wet ground
as withered leaves
In Autumn
Those are beautiful words. I hope the sun comes out soon.
drops of tears
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Let them merge with rain or shine like stars....tears are not always bad.. some times they are good too..
A beautiflly written poem this that appears to feel free in the confinement of 160..
Here's inviting you to visit my page..to read Tears, Stars and Flowers.. Posted on May 20, 2010.. It will be a pleasure welcoming you..
Beautifully written :) And I am sure God will hear your prayer:)
ReplyDeleteThoughts of tomorrow are what get us through. I love the teardrops writing the word believe - fantastic! It is impressive writing entire poems with 160 characters. I seem to need a tome!
ReplyDeleteUma this is so full of hope and beautifully written. I love it! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis poem has a tinge of sadness, not unlike autumn.
ReplyDeleteDear Umamahashwari.. first of all congratulations.. for the award.
ReplyDeleteSecond, how I wish you would have chosen 140 Characters so that it could have been perfect for the Twitter to spread across.
Finally I liked both of them so much... Great writing and specially since I love haiku's and short verses... Thanks for sharing...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
Awesome! Congrats on the award. I haven't read much on your blog, but my strong feel from a couple of poetry I have read so far, you are truly deserving. keep blogging.
ReplyDeleteapt 160.
ReplyDeleteso nice to have you in,
ReplyDeletelove your positive attitude and beautiful poetry.
have fun!
Nice. This is great writing. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteExcellent 160s. You've certainly risen to the occasion and proved worthy of the award. Congrats on that. Lovely photo ...
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Welcome to Rally!
Here's mine:
http://musingbymoonlight.com/2010/10/07/communing-with-snake/
hope is something that keeps everyone going in life .. without hope one dosnt live a life .. but merely exists for the sake ....
ReplyDeletealways keep your hopes alive ... no matter what ...
Great poems .. love the way you just changed the whole set keeping alive the same emotion ...
keep writing ...
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The merging of 2 subjects along with the photograph make this piece a creative wonder!
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