Every wednesday, poeters are given picture prompt by Magpie Tales.We have to write a poem or short vignette using the picture featured in their post as our inspiration.The below picture prompted me to write Two Haiku's (5-7-5) of an opened window.
Haiku 1: Thoughts of a person caught in prison mentally
Through darkness I saw
A lost opportunity
An escape shines bright
Haiku 2: Thoughts of a person caught in prison physically
Darkness everywhere
My only way to escape
An opened window
My only way to escape
An opened window
Poem above written for Magpie Tales picture prompt.
"...a lost opportunity..." What a great line.
ReplyDeleteIt is always good IF there is an open window through which one can escape...either in actuality or by gazing at what is outside. Nice Haiku.
ReplyDeleteinteresting pair of approaches
ReplyDeletei really like the way you used escape like a light at the end of the tunnel great haikus :)
ReplyDeleteAmazing how similar the two prisoners can be. Great haikus!
ReplyDeleteAmazing the difference between a mentally ill person and a regular prisoner. Beautifully described.
ReplyDeleteMany of us have related to this Magpie in the same way. Very nice haiku's & I love the piano music in the background. Lovely!
ReplyDeletepowerful piece.
ReplyDeletehope you well.
Interesting take on the prompt!
ReplyDeletetwo separate views on light on escape...thank you..bkm
ReplyDeleteI really liked your Haiku. I am not so good at it. Never attempted it.
ReplyDeleteThe concept of darkness and light, captivity( of thoughts, etc) and freedom is nice.
Two wonderful haiku's , well done! :o)
ReplyDeleteboth haiku are powerful - strong message
ReplyDeletethanks for stopping by my place
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These are both so truthfully and magically worded!
ReplyDeleteso powerful...both of them hell
ReplyDeleteWonderful Haikus but I have to admit that number one is my favorite!
ReplyDeletetwo nice haikus! well done
ReplyDeleteVery beautifully written and a good depiction of prisoner of mind and a body in the prison..
ReplyDeleteboth are poignant...i think that as many are mentally if not more these days...
ReplyDelete@all Thanks
ReplyDelete@Diane&Brian...I did'nt mean its a mentally ill person but a person stuck between problems in between searching for a solution mentally .
I learn to Look how poems pictures itself differently in each poets mind :)
great magpie--I can see how this view when imprisoned physically or mentally would be challenging and elicit pain and yearning--c
ReplyDeleteDarkness can be imprisoning... Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the freshness of this response.
ReplyDeleteInteresting -- lost opportunities, it reminds me of how we carelessly let time slip through our hands, unnoticed like the back door to the house left open.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haiku and lovely music.
joanny
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