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Wednesday 13 October 2010

An opened window - A prisoner

Every wednesday, poeters are given picture prompt by Magpie Tales.We have to write a poem or short vignette using the picture featured in their post as our inspiration.The below picture prompted me to write Two Haiku's (5-7-5) of an opened window.


Haiku 1: Thoughts of a person caught in prison mentally

Through darkness I saw
A lost opportunity
An escape shines bright

Haiku 2: Thoughts of a person caught in prison physically

Darkness everywhere
My only way to escape
An opened window
Poem above written for Magpie Tales picture prompt.

24 comments:

  1. "...a lost opportunity..." What a great line.

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  2. It is always good IF there is an open window through which one can escape...either in actuality or by gazing at what is outside. Nice Haiku.

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  3. i really like the way you used escape like a light at the end of the tunnel great haikus :)

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  4. Amazing how similar the two prisoners can be. Great haikus!

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  5. Amazing the difference between a mentally ill person and a regular prisoner. Beautifully described.

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  6. Many of us have related to this Magpie in the same way. Very nice haiku's & I love the piano music in the background. Lovely!

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  7. Interesting take on the prompt!

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  8. two separate views on light on escape...thank you..bkm

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  9. I really liked your Haiku. I am not so good at it. Never attempted it.

    The concept of darkness and light, captivity( of thoughts, etc) and freedom is nice.

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  10. Two wonderful haiku's , well done! :o)

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  11. both haiku are powerful - strong message

    thanks for stopping by my place

    :)

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  12. These are both so truthfully and magically worded!

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  13. so powerful...both of them hell

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  14. Wonderful Haikus but I have to admit that number one is my favorite!

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  15. Very beautifully written and a good depiction of prisoner of mind and a body in the prison..

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  16. both are poignant...i think that as many are mentally if not more these days...

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  17. @all Thanks
    @Diane&Brian...I did'nt mean its a mentally ill person but a person stuck between problems in between searching for a solution mentally .
    I learn to Look how poems pictures itself differently in each poets mind :)

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  18. great magpie--I can see how this view when imprisoned physically or mentally would be challenging and elicit pain and yearning--c

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  19. Darkness can be imprisoning... Nicely done.

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  20. I enjoyed the freshness of this response.

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  21. Interesting -- lost opportunities, it reminds me of how we carelessly let time slip through our hands, unnoticed like the back door to the house left open.

    Beautiful haiku and lovely music.

    joanny
    http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

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