tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post936151092367183783..comments2024-02-02T19:22:16.209-08:00Comments on R H Y T H M U S : ResemblanceUma Anandanehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11529447615364043190noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-42614182802698873532011-08-05T20:15:06.810-07:002011-08-05T20:15:06.810-07:00Nice poem da...very thoughtful :)Nice poem da...very thoughtful :)Gita Jaishankarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09487678400890683498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-21576237795927481872011-08-05T11:57:17.399-07:002011-08-05T11:57:17.399-07:00Big topic here. Normally I would suggest focusing...Big topic here. Normally I would suggest focusing on something small, an object of interest perhaps, but I think you've managed to convey your thoughts well without doing that. As we're focusing this week on redundant words/phrasing I'm going to do a line by line just to demonstrate how paring a piece down to its essence can serve to strengthen it. I also think the piece would Caryshttp://rockp88l.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-16985257423234114372011-08-04T17:24:55.687-07:002011-08-04T17:24:55.687-07:00i would add a line before the black holes for sure...i would add a line before the black holes for sure just to add emphasis as that starts my fav part...the repeat of yellow loses me a bit and think you could come up with another synonym there that would enhance it...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-27075931244409919232011-08-04T13:20:00.681-07:002011-08-04T13:20:00.681-07:00I enjoyed the feel of macro and micro cosmic assoc...I enjoyed the feel of macro and micro cosmic association in this piece. Beautiful write ~ RoseAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09988016086874324471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-18150941568636160582011-08-03T21:04:00.302-07:002011-08-03T21:04:00.302-07:00Much food for thought.
— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
A...Much food for thought.<br />— K<br /><br />Kay, Alberta, Canada<br />An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous TravelKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-5878027307022288392011-08-03T16:28:03.074-07:002011-08-03T16:28:03.074-07:00Not sure if my previous comment "took"--...Not sure if my previous comment "took"--I love the images you create and was able to visualize them as I read.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-22101283611656589252011-08-03T16:26:41.097-07:002011-08-03T16:26:41.097-07:00Beautiful images. I could visualize it as I read.Beautiful images. I could visualize it as I read.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-41813028509148280432011-08-02T18:14:45.980-07:002011-08-02T18:14:45.980-07:00Very visual poem--I'm seeing a spinning pinwhe...Very visual poem--I'm seeing a spinning pinwheel of hot metal between heaven and earth.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-85964288392997513132011-08-02T13:28:16.022-07:002011-08-02T13:28:16.022-07:00nice...love the part toward the end..the question ...nice...love the part toward the end..the question in the black holes...becuase this opens it up well beyond just the sun or a wind vain...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-36366018015762847222011-08-02T10:54:45.132-07:002011-08-02T10:54:45.132-07:00Very Interesting and unique take on the prompt..I ...Very Interesting and unique take on the prompt..I loved it! :)Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2374770906922548577.post-24348559656180127282011-08-02T08:19:21.355-07:002011-08-02T08:19:21.355-07:00Really excellent!
I enjoyed the imagery of the bri...Really excellent!<br />I enjoyed the imagery of the bright ball of fire and the question about black holes.<br />Thank you for taking this one cosmic.cosmos camihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09558327124451076957noreply@blogger.com